Art of Styling Sentences, Ann Longknife, K.D. Sullivan (AOSS) (MANDATORY)

The Pocket Style Manual, Diana Hacker (HACKER) (OPTIONAL)

(some of the readings are placed online)

SR=Supplemental Response (an assignment that helps you practice some of the techniques found in the main assignment, this is a fully-graded assignment that should assist you in the writing of the MAJOR FOUR ESSAYS worth 20 HW points)

IC=In class Essay (an assignment mandated by the LLL Department, this 1-2 page in-class essay is worth 100 HW points)

GP=Weekly Grammar Point;/Sentence Structure Points I ask that you practice the online grammar quizzes available to you by clicking on the relevant link. I do not grade these quizzes and do not need your scores for these quizzes.

NOTE: On certain conference days, I may ide to hold class OUTSIDE, weather permitting, so please bring sunscreen, sunglasses, and tasty food and beverages.

Class Orientation;
Teaching Philosophy/Policies

Setting Up, Talking Story.

ICEBREAKERS/

Take a few days to read over the online course content, especially the syllabus. Your main goal is to familiarize yourself with my class, course policies, and website. Please generate some questions for me if you have them: ask them in class, or, if you are shy, email me, davink@hawaii.edu or talk to me during office hours in Kalia 216 or at the Honda Int'l Center (Iliahi 112). I want to really make sure that you feel welcome in my class, and want to discuss the class with you if you feel confused, apprehensive, or forsee any difficulties with English 100.

1. WRITE: complete my QUESTIONNAIRE (1-2 pages); try to write in a résumé-based format.

2. READ: "Syllabus" (online) very thoroughly and carefully;

3. POST anonymous or signed comment on my blog, http://mrkenglish100.blogspot.com/ In the future, feel free to post comments and questions on that blog—treat it like a message board. Come up with a 5-8 letter/number codeword if you want to put your name/moniker on the blog for some credit. Try not to choose something obvious or offensive.

Turn IN "Questionnaire" and

begin Narrative Writing Sample (in class)

Writing Process;
Intro.to the Narrative Essay;
Brainstorming and Freewriting;

Action Verbs

Style Sheet

Narrative Essay;

Read Style Sheet

1.REVISE Narrative Writing Sample; (SR) 20 HW pts.

2. WRITE "Movie Assignment" (Action Verbs) (SR) (practicing action verbs in a narrative) 20 HW pts.

Direct deliberate SV. (Simple SV pattern for dramatic effect)

Pattern of the Week: S V. "Jesus wept." "Huo Yuanjia kicked and punched."

DUE: Movie Assignment; + Narrative Writing Sample.

Share Movie Assignment;

Brainstorming;
Developing the Character(s) in Your Narrative.
Start Character Freewrite;

In-class:

Menu Assignment

"Syllabus" ;

How to Analyze An Assignment

1. Pick and Read ONE story from Diamond Journal; (copies can be found on racks around campus, or you can click on the link and check out the bottom of the page) Index card question will be asked regarding this story.

2. Write: a 250 word (1 pg. or more) "Character Freewrite" (SR) that features a character in your narrative, based on the character in your narrative writing sample ; (SR) 20 HW points

SAMPLE (LINK 1)

SAMPLE (LINK 2)

OR OPTION #2,

2. Write your Menu Assignment (SR) if needed.

DUE: Character Freewrite or Menu Assignment

Shift away from people: shift into describing settings and places.

Loop Writing Poem:

Describing your favorite food at your favorite Restaurant, Menu Assignment

Writing Process

Describing People

Description

Writing a Restaurant Review ;

Evaluation

1. (OPTIONAL) REVISE Movie Assignment; OR Narrative Writing Sample. OR Menu Assignment OR Character Freewrite if appropriate.(1-2 pages) Focus on grammar-based revisions and

learn from your mistakes by writing out 1) the code, 2) the rule; 3) the sentence(s) for improvement; 4) the revised sentence(s), and the function of that rule.

2. Eat out at a restaurant this weekend. A cheap restaurant is fine. Document, if it's okay with the staff, and probably with a digital camera, the general atmosphere of that restaurant. Also document the meal itself (with pictures). In writing, do a 1-2 page "Restaurant Review," imagining that you were a food critic writing for a famous Food Network blog column. Include pictures in your assignment to make it more appealing for the reader.

Write out a Restaurant Review

-Things you might consider: 1) the exterior appeal of the restaurant, if any; 2) the interior mood or ambiance; 3) THE FOOD; 4) describing the food presentation and taste; 5) the service...6) Overall appeal (Star Rating or Fork Rating is acceptable)

Sample from Honolulu Advertiser: Hakkei

Introductory or concluding Participles:

Participle phrase, SV.

SV, participle phrase.

Charging into the Persian flanks, Leonidas threw (SV) his mighty spear into their midst and roared, “Spartans, rally to me!”

Exhausted by Neo’s lack of progress in kung fu, Morpheus sent (SV) Neo to virtual training to improve his skills.

To avoid hearing McLovin’s weird sex stories about the party, McLovin’s roommate turned on (SV) his iPod and ignored him.

DUE: Optional revised or Character Description/ Menu Assignment and

DUE: Restaurant Review

Dialogue Assignment

1. Read, Style Sheet (please follow the style sheet's guidlines for your papers)

2. Read, Reading an Essay for this Course; (online);

3. Read: Chang-rae Lee, "Sea Urchin" or Amy Tan, "Fish Cheeks"

(IC#1)

4. Prepare for In-Class Response (IC) #1Chang-rae Lee, "Sea Urchin" or Amy Tan, "Fish Cheeks" (50 HW points)

(IC#1) Question TBA (to be announced) in-class.

and try to use quote-based evidence to support your claims; and try to use quote-based evidence to support your claims;

IC Response on Chang-rae Lee, "Sea Urchin" or Amy Tan, "Fish Cheeks"

Discuss: In-Class Response (IC);
Outline and Prep.

Writing a Narrative Essay;

Narrative Essay

1. Outline and draft Essay #1,

Expectations: around 3-4 pages and bring two copies for your peer-editors to look at. Use your codename;

Prepare 2 copies for your peer-editors (one for a classmate and one for your instructor)

DUE: Essay #1, first draft; (bring two copies, draft can be nameless)

Revising and Editing; (verbal feedback)
Peer-editing in groups:

AOSS, 07-11

(Pattern 1)

 SV; SV.

SV; ____, SV.

SV; SV, and SV.

SV, but SV; SV.

Kubota played earnestly on his Nintendo Wii (tm); nonetheless, after an hour, he clumsily smashed the Wii-mote controller into the T.V. screen.

Andy's toupee blew off his head; fluttering, flailing, floundering like a wounded ostrich, it sailed away into the distance.

In general, I enjoy sweet azuki bean ice cream, but I am on a diet; I must refrain.

2nd Draft Conferences

Revising and Editing;
Peer-editing in groups:

1. At this stage, check to see if you have 1) a catchy title; 2) an effective "hook sentence"; 3) effective descriptions; 4) a moral or lesson about your experience.

2. Fully Mark up your own paper; read your paper aloud per the suggestions in Bullock's text;

3. Write Final Draft;

4. Write Narrative Evaluation;

DUE: Final Draft of Narrative Essay + Narrative Evaluation;

Intro. to Expository Essay;

Freewriting;
Brainstorming;
Freewriting on Topics;

Start Expository Writing Sample (SR);

Expository Essay;

Expository Genre;

Reading an Essay for this Course; (online);

1. Begin your expository research in the library or online, etc. Google is a good start.

2. Revise Expository Writing Sample; (SR) 20 HW points

Compound Sentence w/ Elliptical Construction / Inverse Construction

S V DO or SV ; S, DO or SV.

SV DO; DO, V, S.

Barbie and Ken each had a different goal in marriage; Ken, money; Barbie, love.

Leonidas held aloft his spear as a Spartan king ought; the spear resonated with bloodlust, Leonidas' own.

My car's wheels screeched on the pavement, burning their rubber coats; the coats began fraying, signaling the demise of my rims, hence my car.

DUE: Expository Writing Sample (SR);
Topic: Finding Stuff

Topic: Crafting a Thesis

Reading: EXPOSITORY ESSAY SAMPLES:

"An Oasis in the City," Andrei Lyovin

"The Soul of Kaimuki," Kristen Lee

Thesis Review/PIE Intro.

discussion;

1. Write: Craft out three versions of a potential thesis statement for your expository essay. (1 page)

2. Create a description of your place, "Place Description" 20 HW points (this assignment is similar to the narrative essay's Character Freewrite, but this time, your character is the place you've selected). It's advisable that you actually go to that place so as to get a better sense of what that place looks like, etc.

You might also like to refer to your "Restaurant Review" to see how to structure your Description around objective, then descriptive, then subjective structures.

1. Expository Thesis Statements Due.

2. "Place Description" 20 HW points DUE

Continue searching for your one source, one quote requirement on Google (or conduct an interview, survey, etc). Think about which In-Class Response (IC) you'd like to read: one of the RR's is pro-Waikiki; the other is highly critical of Waikiki. You choose.

(PREPARE FOR IC Review)

1. Read essay entitled "Waikiki: My Home Away from Home" by K. Chan; or read essay "Waikiki's Spirit" by C. Taylor.

2. Get ready for IC Review, (2 pages max) on "Waikiki: My Home . . ." or "Waikiki's Spirit" (50 HW points)

remember that it helps to be familiar with the questions found on each reading.

In-Class Response (IC) #2 on "Surreal Waikiki" or "Waikiki's Spirit"; (RR#2)

Discuss IC

Topic: Topic Sentences
Exer. 4-1 (topic sentences)

1.. Start prewriting process; an outline of your essay will be useful.

3. Strenthgen your outline for your expository essay;

Topic: M.L.A. formatting (Quoting at a Basic Level)

Research;

Drafting

1. Plan and outline for your Expository Essay 1st Draft.

2. Create and write a first draft for your "Expository Essay"; two copies, anonymous okay.

Compound sentence: with explanatory statement.

General statement (idea): specific statement (example).

Brah, jes' get one da kine I no can stand about her: she get hauna farts li'dat.

One thing at Apple Headquarters is certain: Nobody regrets the invention of the iPod.

The following quote underscores the passion and import I hold regarding this place: " " (12-13).

PIE STRUCTURE review

Collaborating;

Peer-editing;

Revising

1. At this stage, check to see if your expository essay possesses 1) a catchy title; 2) an effective "thesis statement; 3) effective descriptions of place; 4) a strong sense of the place.

2. Fully Mark up your own paper; read your paper aloud;

3. Write Second Draft;

4. "Learn Strategies for Rewriting,"

5. Expository Evaluation

1st

Draft Conferences

Collaborating;

Peer-editing;

Revising

1. At this stage, check to see if your expository essay possesses 1) a catchy title; 2) an effective "thesis statement; 3) effective descriptions of place; 4) a strong sense of the place.

2. Fully Mark up your own paper; read your paper aloud;

3. Write Second Draft;

4. "Learn Strategies for Rewriting,"

5. Expository Evaluation

A. Read "Apostrophes"

Hacker, 68-70.

QUOTING;

ELP II

1. Start to think about potential argumentative essay topics. Read newspapers, magazines, or go online and begin preliminary research.

2.. For next class, bring in a print advertisement from ANY magazine or periodical that is selling a product. In class, we will be analyzing how that advertisement appeals to the viewer on a rhetorical level.

ELP III/Review

Bring in your advertisement

Final Draft of Expository Essay Due (Staple the Expository Evaluation to your final draft)

Consultation about Argumentative Topics

Argument

Argumentative Essay

1. begin discussion of argumentative issues/topics.--begin selecting a topic of your choice, and be mindful of the topic selection DEADLINE.

2. Begin your research in the library or online, etc.
Learn how to use Project LILO, Ebsco.host, PLEASE, or Issues and Controversies (see me or research librarian for help)

3. PREPARE for In-Class Essay III, a short response to ONE of the articles or movie about "Cyber-Identities and Cyber-bullying" (50 HW points)

Article One: "Cracking Down on the Cyberbully"

Article Two: "The Friend Game"

Article Three: "Social Networking Websites"

Movie Four: "Growing Up Online"

Questions worth considering for each article or the movie:

1. What is the author's principal thesis? How can you tell that it is a thesis, and is the thesis effective? Use quotes when applicable.
2. In this piece, what evidence is effective in supporting the thesis? What makes the evidence effective? Use quotes when applicable.
3. What assumptions does the author make about the audience (where they are from, how much they know about the topic, what kinds of beliefs the audience has)?
4. How does the author include "real-life" stories about actual people to increase their credibility? Why do "real-life" stories appeal to the audience?
5. How does each author appeal to the emotions of the readers in their respective essay? In what ways do these "emotional" strategies strengthen or detract from her logical arguments?

6. Are there any "fatal" or "grave" flaws to each essay's argument?

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10/27

IN-Class Essay III

Prompt:
“Pick some form of evidence from one of the texts we have seen or read about (movie or articles). Depict, very carefully, how the evidence incorporates the rhetorical appeals (one or more) of ethos, logos, and pathos. How do these appeals make the scene or quote effective?” (Your best bet is to focus on ONE of the major appeals, but you can discuss more if you want).

1. Continue with work on "Argumentative Essay"

2. WRITE: 1st Draft, "Argumentative Essay" (argumentative essay) (prep two copies)

DUE:1st Draft, Argument

Conferences, 1st Draft, "Argumentative Essay"

1. Write: Argumentative 2nd DRAFT; make sure that you have a correct Works Cited. (sample) + Evaluation

2nd Draft DUE

conferences on Argumentative essay

1. Write: Argumentative FINAL DRAFT; make sure that you have a correct Works Cited. (sample) + Evaluation

(At this stage, you should check if you have 1) a catchy hook and title; 2) a bold and clear thesis statement; 3) a strong overview of both sides of the issue; 4) some sense of the solution to the controversy)

2. Review and do MLA-Review QUIZ (20 points--HW)

Introduction to Lit. Analysis.

turn in MLA Review Quiz (HW)

Interpretation Basics (setting, character, conflict, etc.)

1. Write: Argumentative FINAL DRAFT; make sure that you have a correct Works Cited. (sample) + Evaluation

(At this stage, you should check if you have 1) a catchy hook and title; 2) a bold and clear thesis statement; 3) a strong overview of both sides of the issue; 4) some sense of the solution to the controversy)

Lit. Analysis, continued. Old versus New School.

Writing About Literature

Literary Analysis

1. Read and XEROX: one piece in Course Reader (found online or in my office); (OR)

Look online to SELECT your own POEM: do a "lyrics search" on google.

2. Prep: Literary Analysis Topic Proposal

3. Prep: Evaluation for Argumentative Essay.

1. Write Literary Analysis Topic Proposal

2. Do PLAGIARISM EXERCISE (20 HW points); refer to "Acknowledging Sources, Avoiding Plagiarism" for assistance.

DUE: Literary Analysis Topic Proposal;

Due: PLAGIARISM EXERCISE (20 HW points)

Thanksgiving Day Holiday;

WRITE: Summary of a Piece in the Course Reader you Liked or Summarize the Poem/Song You Have Selected (1-2 pg.) (SR ) (20 HW points)

Summary of Poem DUE.

1. Read: Suheir Hammad, "First Writing Since" or Lisa Kanae, "Island Girl," (IC #4) (50 HW points)

2.HW over the Weekend: Prepare for last in-class essay, regarding Hammad or Kanae (in terms of preparation, it helps to answer a minimum of 5 questions, since the answers to your questions can be used as body paragraphs for your in-class essay.

Prompt: Constructing a viable thesis statement, identify, to the best of your knowledge, the theme of "First Writing Since" or "Island Girl." Explain how the details in the poem support that theme.

1. CONTINUE With today's in-class assignment; use that in-class assignment to create a preliminary draft. As always, please bring 2 copies.

2. USE (about 2-3 pages) of
"Invention Activity 1" to assist you in your draft. (ANSWER 4-5 QUESTIONS, then use the material you've discovered for the body paragraphs in your essay.)

Write 1st Draft, Literary Analysis (2 copies)

DUE: DRAFT ONE
Peer editing

CONSULTATION WEEK

Evaluation of Course

Write: 2nd Draft (Lit. Analysis 2 drafts) + LitAnalysis Evaluation

(You can bring other essays to these conferences, time permitting)

1. Prepare FINAL DRAFT, Literary Analysis + Evaluation

Revise, Revise, Revise (all essays, all work that is owed to me)

Last day of instruction.

DUE: FINAL DRAFT of Lit. Analysis Essay Due + LitAnalysis Evaluation;

ALL BACK WORK/FINAL REVISIONS DUE

(ALL BACK WORK DUE)

Please do not bombard me with late work / revisions (in other words, don't revise all 4 of your major essays then give all of them to me to grade on this day. You should be revising your essays and turning them a week after you receive back my grades and comments.

(the end of the semester can be quite stressful, so I want to allow more flexibility for you to conference with me on ALL LATE WORK/REVISIONS, and your Literary Analysis)

Grossman, Lev. "Didn't He Use to Be A Musician?"

Time. 24 Feb. 2003. 10 Mar. 2003. www.ebscohost.com.

Avail. Online:

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